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HANOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTRYFACULTY OF FOREIGN LANGUAGESWRITING PORTFORLIOWRITING SKILL 3Class: NNA3BStudent’s name: Ph m Mạ ạ ườnh C ngStudent code: 20206066 53Teacher’s name: Ms. Dinh NgocHanoi, 2021Topic 1 Module 2: : One of the most important events in your life Outline: Introduction: Hook: A su...

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HANOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTR FACULTY OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES

WRITING PORTFORLIO WRITING SKILL 3 Class: NNA3B Student’s name: Ph ạm Mạnh Cường Student code: 2020606653 Teacher’s name: Ms. Dinh Ngoc

Hanoi, 2021

Topic 1 Module 2: : One of the most important events in your life Outline: Introduction: Hook: A superbly crucial event is a neccessity in our life. Background information: At the end of grade 12, I had an intensely essential entrance exam. Thesis statement: I had distracted from studying and had a big problem. Body: Topic: Grade 12 was a meaningful year for me, but I was just letting it go for a while and getting into a real trouble Setting: At the first semester of grade 12, I truly did not concentrate on my learning course and played a lot. Climax: At the end of that semester, when I received my final result of the test, I was completely stressful and worried. Consequently, I fightened and scared to be failed in my entrance exam. Solution: I was determined to learn everything again in such a thoroughly short time and also trying to make use of my friends assistances. Conclusion: Luckily, I had passed my entrance exam with a really high score. After this event, I realized that everything happened in a abosolutely hard way. If you did not care much about it, you would be a failure. ‘Ver 1: A superbly crucial event is a neccessity in our life. At the end of grade 12, I had an intensely essential entrance exam. I had distracted from studying and had a big problem. Grade 12 was a meaningful year for me, but I was just letting it go for a while and getting into a real trouble. Grade 12 was a meaningful year for me, but I was just letting it go for a while and getting into a real trouble. Because I did not realize how important my study was, I had just ignored what my teachers adviced and what my parents said and played. At the end of that semester, when I received my final result of the test, I was completely stressful and worried. Consequently, I fightened and scared to be failed in my entrance exam. For this reason, I was determined to learn everything again in such a thoroughly short time and also trying to make use of my friends assistances. In such a short time, I noticably seen my improvements through my effort. As a result, at my second test, I had got a reall good result which was made a suprise achievement in my entrance exam. Luckily, I had passed my entrance exam with a really high score. After this event, I realized that everything happened in a abosolutely hard way. If you did not care much about it, you would be a failure. So taking care anything or you waste lots of time.

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Does the essay havethree Yes paragraphs? Yes 2 Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesis statement? Yes 3 Does the body contain enough background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? 4 Does the body include the topic Yes. It is: “Grade 12 was a sentence? Which one? meaningful year for me, but I was just letting it go for a while and getting into a real trouble” 5 Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? 6 Are all the verbs in the correct forms? 7 Does the conclusion explain what you learned from the experience?

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Ver 2: When it comes to a crucial event of my life, my entrance exams suddenly springs to mind. To this day, I still remember vividly that at the end of my grade 12 I had the entrance exams to offer a place at university. I had distracted from learning and gotten into a immensely big trouble. Grade 12 is absolutely important and meaningful to everyone to decide whether keeping motivating or not. I did not exception previously, but I had left things behind and done whatever I wanted. I had just ignored what my teacher adviced and what my parents said as I did not realize how important learning was. Then at the very end of the first semester,

without any sustained effort, I received my dreadful results which was utterly deserted. Consequently, I started to feel frighten and scared to be a failure in the last final tests or the entrance exams. At the same time I deeply understood the idiom “ No pain no cure “ and decided to try all over again. In such a thoroughly short time, I emphasized on praticing the knowledge by doing the test as much as possible and also learned more deeply over what I was learned. Noticeably, I seen my improvement constantly. After a couple of months, I finally did the entrance exams and what I acquired was literally astonishing. Luckily, I had realized the matter early enough to start a sustained effort. And finally I had passed and offered a place at a reputable university – Ha Noi University of Industry. Through the event, I obtained a substantial lesson by all means about the effort. Everything is born to let me down if I do not find the way to overcome, I will be a failure. Taking care or wasting your time meaningless Topic 2 Module 2: My most memorable memory. Outline: Introduction: Hook: Having a prodigious vacation at least once before leaving everything behind or your life will be boring. Background knowledge: I had a gripping trip to HCM city with my lovely family. Thesis: A hideous issue happened. Body: Topic sentence: I was astonished and ecstatic as soon as I knew that I would have a trip to Ho Chi Minh city. Descriptive details: + Was picked up late + Flight deferred + Arrived on time Conclusion: I was definitely scared of being late and missed the flight at such an appalling moment. On the other hand, it will always in my memorable memory that I never forget.

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Narrative essay Having a prodigious vacation at least once before leaving everything behind or your life will be boring. Last summer vacation, I had a gripping trip to Ho Chi Minh city with my lovely family. Conversely, a hideous issue happened then. I was astonished and ecstatic as soon as I knew that I would have a trip to Ho Chi Minh city. Consequently, I prepared lots of things carefully for it. Everything would be brilliant if a hideous issue did not happen. On the day I went, the driver who picked me up to the airport was 30 minutes late. Luckily, my flight was deferred about an hour due to the bad weather. For this reason, I still arrived at the airport on time for the flight. It took me about two hours to get to Ho Chi Minh city. When I got there, I was extremely stunned by the vibrant scenery. Indeed, Ho Chi Minh City always has a profound effect on me, so I really enjoyed the trip. I was definitely scared of being late and missed the flight at such an appalling moment. On the other hand, it will always in my memorable memory that I never forget.

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Does the body contain enough yes background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? Does the body include the topic Yes, sentence? Which one? Topic sentence: “I was astonished and ecstatic as soon as I knew that I would have

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Ver 2: It is widely known that having a prodigious vacation at least once before leaving everything behind or you life will be boring. Last summer vacation, I had a gripping trip to Ho Chi Minh city with my lovely family. Conversely, a hideous issue happened then. I was extremely astonished and ecstatic as soon as I knew that I would have a trip to Ho Chi Minh city. As nothing more than a consequence, I meticulously prepared several things for it. Everything would be perfect if a heinous incident did not occur. The driver that picked me up from the airport was 30 minutes late on the day I traveled. Luckily, my flight was deferred about an hour due to the bad weather. Hence, I got at the airport on time for my trip. By aircraft, it took me roughly two hours to reach to Ho Chi Minh City. When I got there, I was extremely stunned by the vibrant scenery. Indeed, Ho Chi Minh City always has a profound effect on me, so I really enjoyed the trip. I was definitely scared of being late and missed the flight at such an appalling moment. On the other hand, it will always in my memorable memory that I never forget. Ver 3: There is a saying goes a prodigious vacation at least once before leaving everything behind or your life will be boring. That was the reason why I had a gripping trip to Ho Chi Minh city with my lovely family. Conversely, a hideous issue happened then. I was extremely astonished and ecstatic as soon as I knew that I would have a trip to Ho Chi Minh city. As nothing more than a consequence, I meticulously prepared several things for it. Everything would be perfect if a heinous incident did not occur. The driver that picked me up from the airport was 30 minutes late on the day I traveled. Luckily, my flight was deferred about an hour due to the bad weather. Hence, I got at the airport on time for my trip. By aircraft, it took me roughly two hours to reach to Ho Chi Minh City. I was absolutely gobsmacked by the vivid surroundings when I arrived. Indeed, Ho Chi Minh City always has a profound effect on me, so I really enjoyed the trip. I was definitely scared of being late and missed my flight at such an appalling moment. On the other hand, it will always in my memorable memory that I never forget.

Outline Topic 3 module 2: A misunderstanding between you and your friend? Introduction: Hook: Have you ever had a misunderstanding between you and your best friend? Background information: In my best friend’s 18th birthday party, I wanted to make a surprise for her, but things didn’t like I thought Thesis statement: I definitely make a big mistake Body: Topic sentence: 23/04/2020 was my best friend’s 18th birthday, which was really meaningful with me, so I decided to astonish her. Descriptive details: + Planned what I should do + Explained with my friends + Prepared things + Made mistake Conclusion: After such a horrible experience, my relationship with my bestfriend absolutely is being gone on. Conversely, with this experience I could know that everything should be prepared carefully. A small mistake makes a big misunderstanding between us. Ver: 1 Have you ever had a misunderstanding between you and your best friend? At my best friend's 18th birthday party, I honestly wanted to make a surprise for her, but things did not happen as I thought. I definitely made a terrible mistake. April 24th, 2020, was my best friend's 18th birthday, which was thoroughly meaningful to me, so I decided to do something to astonish her. Before her birthday party happened, I had planned a couple of weeks to surprise her. Consequently, I explained my intention to my friend to prepare carefully. Thinking about what I ought to do first was unquestionably a hard portion of my intention. Besides, I altogether finished it without any mistakes. Things would happen directly and superbly if I did not lie to her that I had to go to another party. Since I needed to take the birthday cake from another position, I had to lie to her. As a result, she was immensely sad and disappointed due to waiting too long for such an important event. And her best friend did not come and share with her happiness. Luckily, I got there after beginning a couple of minutes. She went to me, hugged and complained if I did not make things complicated. Apart from her tear, I saw the happiness in her eyes as the most incredible moments in my life.

After such a horrible experience, my relationship with my best friend absolutely is being gone on. Conversely, I could know that everything that is prepared carefully will remarkably be superb, but do not try to make things complicated. A small mistake makes a big misunderstanding between us. CHECKLIST Questions

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Does the essay have three paragraphs? Yes Yes Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesis statement? 3 Does the body contain enough Yes background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? 4 Does the body include the topic sentence? Yes. It is “April 24th, 2020, Which one? was my best friend's 18th birthday, which was thoroughly meaningful to me, so I decided to do something to astonish her.” 5 Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? 6 Are all the verbs in the correct forms?

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Ver 2: Have you ever had a misunderstanding between you and your best friend? At my best friend's 18th birthday party, I honestly wanted to make a surprise for her, but things did not happen as I thought. I definitely made a terrible mistake. April 24th, 2020, was my best friend's 18th birthday, which was thoroughly meaningful to me, so I decided to do something to astonish her. Before her birthday party happened, I had planned a couple of weeks to surprise her. Then, I explained my intention to my friend to prepare carefully. Thinking about what I ought to do first was unquestionably a

hard portion of my intention. Fortuitously, I altogether finished it without any mistakes. Things would be happened directly and superbly if I did not lie to her that I had to join another party. Since I needed to take the birthday cake from another position, I had to lie to her. As a result, she was immensely sad and disappointed due to waiting too long for such an important event. And her best friend did not come and share with her happiness. Luckily, I got there after beginning a couple of minutes. She went to me, hugged and complained if I did not make things complicated. Apart from her tear, I saw the happiness in her eyes as the most incredible moments in my life. After such a horrible experience, my relationship with my best friend absolutely is being gone on. Conversely, I could know that everything that is prepared carefully will remarkably be superb, but do not try to make things complicated. A small mistake makes a big misunderstanding between us.

Topic 1 Module 3: TV is bad for children. Do you agree or disagree? Outline: Introduction: -Hook: With the rapid technological developments, many incredible devices were invented include TV. -Background information: Some research has shown that there is nothing detrimetal in watching TV, but others have not. -Thesis statement: I strongly believe that spending too much time on TV has a negative effect on children due to three main reasons. Body paragraph: -Topic sentence: It is widely known that TV has a several of impacts on children. -Examples/reason: + Affecting eyes. + Containing cruel content. + Being addicted. -Counter-argument: This may be true; otherwise, this evidence does not mean that TV is not crucial. -Refutation: It simply demonstrates that we ought to let children contact positively by supervising the time they could watch the TV.

Conclusion: Watching TV is literally harmful for the children who is not in control of their abilities due to its effect on their eyes, its cruel content, and its addiction. Version 1: With the rapid technological developments, many incredible devices were invented include TV. Some research shown that there is nothing detrimetal in watching TV, but others indicated that TV has a deleterious impact on children, and try to prevent their child from watching TV. Personally, I strongly believe that spending too much time on TV has an adverse effect on children due to three main reasons, which I will mention below. It is widely known that TV has a several of impacts on children. First of all, spending in front of TV set more than a couple of hours daily could make children meet some vision problems easily than others. UV radiation, which is contained in TV light, can temporarily damage their cornea and the conjunctiva after exposuring regularly. As a result, children will simply be nearsighted. Additionally, TV might be involved violent content, political matters or even adult content, if children consistently disturbs these kind of contents, they will be distorting their mind. Nowadays, smart TV is well received with the intelligent and convenient contact leading to the booming era of social media such as Youtube, Facebook, and Tiktok. Hence, being contained negative content is not excepted through all the social network normally, and children will meet the cruel content easily and grow their mind in a really negative way. Finally, being addicted to TV is currently engaged. Because of busy and stressful lifestyle of the parents, they tend to ignore and leave their children behind the TV screen. Subsequently, children is addicted the interesting thing in the TV. Gradually, they will be lost the social contact with thier friends, less active and energetic than others. This may be true; otherwise, this evidence does not mean that TV is not crucial. It simply demonstrates that we ought to let children contact positively by supervising the time they could watch the TV. Watching TV is literally harmful for the children who is not in control of their abilities due to its effect on their eyes, its cruel content, and its addiction.

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Version 2: Many fantastic inventions, such as television, have been developed as a result of rapid technical advancements. Some studies have found that watching TV frequently has a positive effect on children, whereas others have observed that it has a negative influence on children and strives to keep their children from watching TV. Personally, I strongly believe that spending too much time on TV has an adverse effect on children for three main reasons, which I will mention below. It is widely known that TV has several impacts on children. First of all, spending in front of TV set more then a couple of hours daily could make children meet some vision problems easily than others. UV radiation from the TV light can temporarily damage their cornea and the conjunctiva after exposuring regularly. As a result, children will simply be nearsighted. Additionally, TV might be involved in violent content, political matters or even adult content; thus, children's minds will be distorted if they are continuously approached these content. Nowadays, smart TV is well received with its intelligent and convenient contact leading to the booming era of social media such as Youtube, Facebook, and Tiktok. Importantly, due to the busy and stressful life, parents tend to ignore and leave their children behind the TV screen. Subsequently, children will be addicted to the interesting programmes on the TV and will lose social interaction with their pals and become less active and enthusiastic than others gradually. Conversely, television gives children the opportunity to learn and experience what they can not be learn from the book b...