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HANOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTRYFACULTY OF FOREIGN LANGUAGESWRITING PORTFORLIOWRITING SKILL 3Class: NNA3B – KStudent’s name: Nguyễễn Th Thanh Ph ngị ươStudent code: 20206068 56Teacher’s name: Ms. Dinh NgocHanoi, 2021Table of ContentModuleTopic Version1Signed/ ScoreVersion 2Signed/ scoreVersion 31Module ...

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HANOI UNIVERSITY OF INDUSTR FACULTY OF FOREIGN LANGUAGES

WRITING PORTFORLIO WRITING SKILL 3 Class: NNA3B – K15 Student’s name: Nguyễễn Th ị Thanh Ph ương Student code: 2020606856 Teacher’s name: Ms. Dinh Ngoc

Hanoi, 2021

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Module 1 Narrative essay

1. An importance event or experience in your life

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2. A memorable memory

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Module 2 Opinion essay

3. Time –writing: A misunderstanding between yourself and someone else 1. TV is bad for children. Do you agree or disagree? 2. Is it a good idea for university students to have a part-time job? 3. Time-writing: It is said that school uniform should be obligatory at high school. Do you agree or disagree?

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MODULE 1 Topic 1: An importance event or experience in your life Outline 1.

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Hook: Have you had any memorable event in your life? Background information: One of the most crucial events in my life is my graduation day. Thesis statement: I was extremely thrilled when I remembered it. 2.

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Topic sentence: My graduation day has brought me many unforgettable memories. The character: My teachers, my classmates, my friends, and I. The setting: The Closing Ceremony at my school The climax: When we had lunch, our monitor had a misunderstanding with us, so she extremely angry and left. The solution: We had explained and apologized to each other. 3.

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Although there was something unexpected happened, we had a meaningful graduation day. Version 1 Have you had any memorable event in your life? One of the most crucial events in my life is my graduation day. I was extremely thrilled when I remembered it. My graduation day has brought me many unforgettable memories. I got up very early to prepare and make up. I had the graduation ceremony with the closing ceremony at my school. We all wore “Ao dai”, so we were very beautiful and tender. My class throught a photo shoot to take some commemorative photos. When we had lunch, our monitor had a misunderstanding with us, so she extremely angry and then left. We were remarkably confused, but we were calm very soon. We had explained and

apologized to monitor. Everything has back to normal. We had a night party and said goodbye in the excitement of everyone. Although there was something unexpected happened, we had a meaningful graduation day. We also learn remaining calm in every situations to take wellbehaved. It is a very important characteristic that can help my personal life. My graduation also represented my growing up. CHECKLIST

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Does the essay have three paragraphs? Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesis statement? Does the body contain enough background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? Does the body include the topic sentence? Which one?

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Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? Are all the verbs in the correct forms?

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Yes. It is: “My graduation day has brought me many unforgettable memories.” Yes

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Version 2 Have you had any memorable events in your life? One of the most crucial events in my life is my graduation day. I am still extremely thrilled when I remind it. My graduation day has brought me numerous unforgettable memories. I got up earlier than normal in order to prepare and put make-up on. That day, the female students wore “Ao dai” – one of the most specialized symbols of Vietnam so they looked so pretty and gender. We also invited a photographer to

take some commemorative photos. When we had lunch, our monitor had a misunderstanding with us, she was extremely angry that made us very confused. After calming down, we explained and apologized to the monitor. Luckily, everything eventually turned back, and we had a superb party and said goodbye to everyone. Although there was some unexpected things happened, we still had a meaningful graduation day. We also learned that remaining calm in every situations amandantly is a salient values to take-well behaved. It is a very important characteristic that can help my personal life.

Topic 2: A memorable memory. Outline 1. Introduction Hook: Have you ever travelled with your friends? Background information: My friends and I had a trip to Nha Trang for 3 days. Thesis statement: I had never more ecstatic in my life. 2. Body - Took 2 hours to fly from Ha Noi - I was very excited whrn I was the plane - The first day, my friends and I watch the sunrise - We sampled lots of local cuisine - Tried skydiving, surfing and diving to see the coral reef - Bought fresh ingredients and grilled on the beach 3. Conclusion During the trip, we were jubilant and had many indelible memories. The trip to Nha Trang really was the memorable memory of us. If we have a chance, we will definitely come back there. Version 1 Have you ever travelled with your friends? My friends and I had a trip to Nha Trang for 3 three days. It was the first time we have travelled since we were in university. I had never more ecstatic in my life. I was so eager before the trip that I prepared numerous things in advance. It took about 2 two hours to fly from Ha Noi, fortunately, the flight took off on time. I remember that I was very stunned by the incredible scenery when I was on the plane. On the first day, we got up early to watch the sunrise on the beach. After that, we sampled many local cuisines such as grilled fermented pork roll, grilled beef, rice vermicelli with grilled fish and jellyfish, fresh seafood. We also tried skydiving, surfing and diving to see the coral reef. The last evening, we bought fresh ingredients from a local market and grilled the on the beach. We sit together and talk about the memories that we experienced until late at night. During the trip, we were jubilant and had many indelible memories. The trip to Nha

Trang really was the memorable memory of us. If we have a chance, we will definitely come back there. CHECKLIST Questions

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1 Does the essay havethree paragraphs? 2 Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesis statement? 3 Does the body contain enough background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? 4 Does the body include the topic sentence? Which one?

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Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? 6 Are all the verbs in the correct forms? 7 Does the conclusion explain what you learned from the experience?

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Comment: Nguyễn Thị Nhật Phương Your essay quite good! I found some small mistakes, I corrected. Hope that they make your essay better. In the topic sentence, you should write:” Have you ever travelled with your friends? My friends and I had a trip to Nha Trang for three days . It was the first time we have travelled since we were in university. Therefore, it was memorable memories which I had never more ecstatic in my life.” You’d better have “memorable” or “unforgettable” in order to give reader’s attention and make your essay seem more special. In the body, I didn’t realize your topic sentence. I think you should add a topic sentence. Version 2 Have you ever travelled with your friends? Last year, my friends and I had a trip to Nha Trang for three days. I had never more ecstatic before, this is the most unforgottable memory in my life.

It was the first time we have travelled since we were in university. Therefore, I was so eager and I prepared numerous things in advance. It took about two hours to fly from Ha Noi, fortunately, the flight took off on time. I remember that I was very stunned by the incredible scenery when I was on the plane. On the first day, we got up early to watch the sunrise on the beach. After that, we sampled many local cuisines such as grilled fermented pork roll, grilled beef, rice vermicelli with grilled fish and jellyfish, fresh seafood. We also tried skydiving, surfing and diving to see the coral reef. The last evening, we bought fresh ingredients from a local market and grilled the on the beach. We sit together and talk about the memories that we experienced until late at night. During the trip, we were very jubilant and had many indelible memories. The trip to Nha Trang is absolutely memorable memory of us. If we have a chance, we will definitely come back there.

Topic 3: A misunderstanding between yourself and someone else. Outline 1. Introduction: Hook: Have you ever had conflict with someone else? Background information: When I was a student in secondary school, my best friend and I had a misunderstanding. Thesis statement: Although this is a little misunderstanding, it is keeping me in my mind. 2. Body: Topic sentence: This misunderstanding occurred as a result of my lying to my mother. Descriptive details: - I lied to my mom that I went to school, but then I went out with my friend. - It’s only my best friend knows. - But when I came back home, my mom asked me why I lied and beat me. - I didn’t know why my mom found out and I thought that my best friend told to my mom. - My best friend explained so much, but I didn’t believe because I was so angry. - After that, my mom said that she had seen me in the street when she went out. - I appologized to my best friend and we were as close as we used to. 3. Conclusion: After this time, I never lied to my parents again, and I also learned remaining calm in every situation to have well-behaved. I think I should treasure this friendship and not allow misunderstandings to compromise it. Version 1 Have you ever had conflict with someone else? When I was a student in secondary school, my friend and I had a misunderstanding. Although this is a little misunderstanding, it has kept me in my thought. This misunderstanding occurred as a result of my lying to my mother. I still remember that it was a beautiful day. We had an afternoon leave from school, so

we made a plan to go out. Because of my mother’s severity, I dared not ask her permission and told her that I was in school. This afternoon was a blast time for us. When I arrived home, my mother was waiting for me. She didn’t look so good. When she found out that I was lying, she was extremely angry so that she beat me up. I thought that my friend told to my mother so I was angry with her. I haven’t talked to her for five days. My friend tried to talk to me, but I ignored her. I even broke her bicycle, and she had to walk home. A few days later, when my family had lunch, my mother said that her colleague had seen me in the street and talked to her. I was remarkably amazed and felt sorry for my friend. I apologized to her and fortunately she accepted my apology. We were as close as we used to. After this time, I never lied to my parents again, and I also learned remaining calm in every situation to have well-behaved. I think I should treasure this friendship and not allow misunderstandings to compromise it. CHECKLIST Questions

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1 Does the essay havethree paragraphs? 2 Does the introduction include the hook, background information and thesis statement? 3 Does the body contain enough background information and specific details? Do they support the topic sentence of the body paragraph? 4 Does the body include the topic sentence? Which one?

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Yes. It is “This was an unforgettable misunderstanding for me .”

5 Does the essay include time adverbs and subordinating conjunctions? 6 Are all the verbs in the correct forms? 7 Does the conclusion explain what you learned from the experience? Version 2

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Have you ever had conflict with someone else? When I was a student in secondary school, I had a misunderstanding with my best friend. I felt guilty and regretful every time I remind it. This was an unforgettable misunderstanding for me . I still vividly remember that it happened on a beautiful day and I was gotten off school, so I made a plan to go out with my friend. Because of my mother’s severity, I did not dare to ask for her permission and told her that I was at school. That afternoon was majestically a blast for us. When I came back home, my mother had already waited for me and her expression had been aggressive. Subsequently, she was extremely angry and beaten me up due to finding out that I had deceived. I supposed that my friend had told to my mother so I was extremely angry with her and I had not talked to her for five days. Although my friend tried to indicate the truth to me, I still ignored her and even broke her bicycle down. A few days later, when my family had lunch, my mother told me the truth that her colleague had seen me on the street and talked to her. I was suddenly amazed and felt guilty. So that, I apologized to her and fortunately she accepted my apology, we were as close as we used to be. After that experience, I never lied to my parents again, and I also learned remaining calm in every situation to have well-behaved. I think I should treasure this friendship and not allow misunderstandings to compromise it.

MODULE 2 Topic 1: TV is bad for children, do you agree or disagree? Outline 1. Introduction: Hook: Nowadays, TV becomes more popular with almost every family. Background information: However, some people think that TV has many negative effects on children. Thesis statement: Personally, I believe that TV brings more benefits than drawbacks. 2. Body: Topic sentence: Watching TV can brings lots of advantages. + Enhance children’s background knowledge + Develop critical thinking + Entertain with some fun programmes + Help children to be more active and improve their emotions - On the other hands, children who watch TV a lot can have trouble with their health and many disadvantages. 3. Conclusion: To sum up, watching TV is very helpful for children, but children should not watch TV too long. It is extremely important that children need a balance between watching TV and doing outdoor activities. Version 1 Nowadays, TV becomes more popular with almost every family. However, some people think that TV has many negative effects on children. Personally, I believe that TV brings more benefits than drawbacks. Watching TV can brings lots of advantages. Firstly, watching TV helps children enhance their background knowledge about a variety of aspects thanks to education programs. When children watch TV, they can develop critical thinking because there are lots of channel raise some questions for audiences and they need

to answer the questions or look at the photos to find down something. TV is also good for children to entertain with some fun programmes. After learning for a long time, children can watch TV to reduce stress and relax. Moreover, children can be more active due to watching TV. Watching sports programs like football, volleyball or swimming is a great way to get children interested in the outdoor activities. The TV shows encourage children take part in physical activities so they can promote good health and improve their emotions. However, children who watch TV a lot can have trouble with their health and many disadvantages, so they should be able to watch TV in a suitable time. To sum up, watching TV is very helpful for children, but children should not watch TV too long. It is extremely important that children need a balance between watching TV and doing outdoor activities. CHECKLIST 1 2 3 4

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Questions Does the essay have 3 paragraph? Does the introduction include a hook and a thesis? Does the body paragraph have a topic sentence? Does the body paragraph give reasons and explanations that support the topic sentence? Does it give a counterargument and refutation? Does the conclusion refer to the main idea of the essay? Are quantity expressions used to avoid overgeneralizations? Are connectors used to show the relationship ( opposition or support) between ideas?

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Version 2 Nowadays, TV becomes more popular with almost every family. However, some people think that TV has many negative effects on children. Personally, I strongly believe that TV brings more benefits than drawbacks.

On the one hand, watching TV can bring lots of advantages. Firstly, watching education programs helps children enhance their background knowledge about a variety of aspects. When children watch TV, they can develop critical thinking because there are lots of channels that raise some questions for audiences and they need to answer the questions or look at the photos to find down something. TV is also good for children to entertain with some fun programs. After learning for a long time, children can watch TV to reduce stress and relax. Moreover, children can be more active due to watching TV. Watching sports programs like football, volleyball or swimming is a great way to get children interested in outdoor activities. The TV shows encourage children to take part in physical activities so they can promote good health and improve their emotions. On the other hand, many people think that television may be harmful for children. However, some researches show that the children’s health are affected since they spend too much time in watching TV. Furthermore, the cons will be overcome if parents take care of their children and give them the best way to use TV effectively. To sum up, watching TV is very helpful for children, but children should not watch TV too long. It is extremely important that children need a balance between watching TV and doing outdoor activities.

Topic 2: Is it a good idea for university students to have a part-time job? Outline 1. Introduction: Nowadays, university students tend to have a part-time job. Some parents do not allow their children to take on extra work because they think that doing part-time job can cause negative effects. Personally, I strongly believe that having part-time job while studying at university is a good idea. 2. Body: Many university students choose a job to do outside school hours because they see the benefits it brings. - Earn money to pay bill, tuition fee… - Get work experience. - Learn useful skills: time management, money management, team work, organizational skills,… - Expand networking opportunities Conversely, some people think that having part-time job may have disadvantages on students. While doing part-time jobs, students will have a busy schedule and they will get less time for study and themselves so their health and study will be affected. However, if students can balance among working, studying and relaxing, these negative effects can be completely eliminate and students can gain more experiences that can help them in the future. 3. Conclusion: In conclusion, I definitely believe that doing part-time job bring many advantages to university students. Students have to manage their time accordingly and not forget that their primary task is studying. Version 1 Nowadays, university students tend to have a part-time job. Some parents do not allow t...