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The article written by Philip M.Boffey titled “Do Violent Video Games Lead to Violence?” (2019), focuses on how violent video games lead to violence...

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ELC231: INTEGRATED LANGUAGE SKILLS III EVALUATIVE COMMENTARY OUTLINE

Name & Matric No

1) Nur Sarah Binti Zulkifli (2019266194) 2) Siti Hajar Binti Mohd Azha (2019432516)

Group

CS1113A

Semester

Oct 2020 - Feb 2021

Lecturer

Madam Zuriani Yaacob

Article

Do Violent Video Games Lead to Violence ? (Philip, 2019)

INTRODUCTION

Overview of the Article

The article that is written by Philip M.Boffey (2019) focuses on how violent video games lead to violence.

The author’s tone is neutral. He is serious that violent video Author’s Tone

games are one of the causes that lead to violence.

BODY 1

The amount of violence depicted in some current video games is astounding. Main Point 1

Victims are killed with every imaginable implement, including machine guns, clubs, hammers, and chainsaws, Supporting Detail 1

Evidence 1

among others.

The gore was graphically described by Justice Samuel Alito in a concurring opinion to the 2011 Supreme Court decision.

BODY 2

Main Point 2 They show at best some correlation between exposure to violent entertainment and minuscule real-world effects.

Supporting Detail 2

Children feeling more aggressive or making louder noises in the few minutes after playing a violent game than after playing a nonviolent game.

Evidence 2

The late Justice Antonio Scalia, writing for the majority in the 2011 Supreme Court decision, scoffed at the notion that violent video games cause real-world violence.

BODY 3

Main Point 3

The link between violent video game exposure and aggressive behavior is “one of the most studied and best established.”

Supporting Detail 3 That aggressiveness

included insults, threats, hitting,

pushing, hair pulling, biting, and other forms of verbal and physical aggression.

Evidence 3 The association’s official position, expressed in a resolution adopted in August 2015.

PERSONAL CRITIQUE Overall stand regarding the article: ● Agree ● Disagree ● Agree and Disagree

We fully agree with Philip’s ideas.

Statement / Quotation 1 from the article that you want to comment

“The amount of violence depicted in some current video

Your stand regarding statement 1 from the article

We agree with Philip’s opinion.

Your personal reason to support the stand / statement 1

We agree with Philip’s opinion because it is true that some

games is outstanding.” (Philip, 2019)

violent video games show a lot of violent action without filtering it.

Evidence from another article to support your reason/ as back-up point

According to Loria (2018), she said that it is easy to find

Reference 1

Loria, K. (2018, Jun 20). How playing video games affects

video games that portray blood, gore and violence.

your

body

and

brain.

Business

Insider.

https://www.businessinsider.com/video-games-and-violence2018-3

Statement / Quotation 2 from the article that you want to comment

“Video game use is associated with a decrease in empathy

Your stand regarding statement 2 from the article

We agree with Philip’s opinion.

Your personal reason to support the stand / statement 2

and other socially desirable behavior.”

We agree with Philip’s opinion because when a person is too focused on video games, they will be less social with the outside world.

Evidence from another article to support your reason/ as back-up point

According to Sukkyung You (2014), violent video games have a significant direct effect on aggressive behaviors, and a significant indirect effect on prosocial behaviors.

Reference 2

Sukkyung You. (2014, 12 9). Impact of violent video games on

the

social

behaviors

of

adolescents.

https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/10.1177/014303431456292 1

CONCLUSION

Restatement of Personal Critique

In a nutshell, we strongly agree with Philip that violence games are one of the reasons that can lead to the violence in real life.

Final Comments

Parents need to monitor their children's activities, especially regarding the use of smartphones or any video games so that they are not so obsessed until they can endanger themselves or the people around them.

The article written by Philip M.Boffey titled “Do Violent Video Games Lead to Violence?” (2019), focuses on how violent video games lead to violence. The author’s tone is neutral. Philip is serious that violent video games are one of the causes that lead to violence. Firstly, Philip declares that the amount of violence shown in some current video games is extraordinary. For example, the victims are murdered with every danger that we can imagine such as machine guns, clubs, hammers, chainsaws and other things. As evidence, in the 2011 Supreme Court decision, the bloodiness was described graphically by Justice Samuel Alito as a concurring opinion. (Philip, 2019) Next, the violent video games show clearly the correlation between the exposure of violent entertainment and little real-world effects. For instance, children tend to make louder noises after a few minutes of playing violent games unlike than after playing nonviolent video games. This is proven by the late Justice Antonio Scalia representing the majority in the 2011 Supreme Court decision and was mocked at the notion regarding this issue. (Philip, 2019) Furthermore, the author mentions that one of the most studied is the correlation between the exposure of violent video games and aggressive behaviour. The aggressive behaviour includes insults, threats, hitting, pushing, hair pulling, biting, and other appearance of real and verbal aggression. As evidence, the association’s official position points out in a resolution adopted in August 2015. (Philip, 2019) For our overall stand, we totally agree with Philip’s idea. He states that “The amount of violence depicted in some current video games is outstanding”. Both of us agree with this statement. This is because some violent video games show a lot of violent action without filtering it. There is also evidence from another article by Loria regarding ours' stand. According to Loria (2018), she said that it is easy to find video games that portray blood, gore and violence.

Next, Philip also states that “Video game use is associated with a decrease in empathy and other socially desirable behavior.”. We both agreed with his statement because when a person is too focused on video games, they will be less social with the outside world. Sukkyung You (2014) also agreed with our stand. He said that violent video games have a significant direct effect on aggressive behaviors, and a significant indirect effect on prosocial behaviors. In a nutshell, we strongly agree with Philip that violence games are one of the reasons that can lead to the violence in real life. As a precaution, parents need to monitor their children's activities, especially regarding the use of smartphones or any video games so that they are not so obsessed until they can endanger themselves or the people around them. (454 words)

REFERENCES

Loria, K. (2018, Jun 20). How playing video games affects your body and brain. Business Insider. https://www.businessinsider.com/video-games-and-violence-2018-3 Philip, M. B. (2019, November 1). Do Violent Video Games Lead to Violence? Dana Foundation. https://www.dana.org/article/do-violent-video-games-lead-to-violence/ Sukkyung You. (2014, 12 9). Impact of violent video games on the social behaviors of adolescents. https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/10.1177/0143034314562921/...