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Name: Patience Jensen Course: UNV-104 Date: 06/15/2020 Instructor: Nicole Denniston

Topic 5: First Draft Self-Evaluation and Reflection Part 1: Revising and Editing Directions: 1. Go through each section below and self-evaluate your first draft by checking if you did or did not complete the task. You do not need instructor feedback from your first draft to complete this worksheet. 2. If you did not complete the task, give a brief explanation of why. Revising and Editing Overall Tips 

Is your paper double spaced? 

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Have you printed out a copy to read over? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Yes or No: No, I have not had access to a printer, but I will be printing it out today to read over

Did you visually scan your paper for paragraph length? Paragraphs that are either too long or shorter than the others may need some revision. 

Yes or No: Yes © 2016. Grand Canyon University. All Rights Reserved.

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Have you read your paper aloud to catch errors? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Have you given your paper to a friend/instructor/CLA tutor to review? 

Yes or No: Yes

Revising 

Did you reread the assignment details? 

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Now that you have a draft, is your thesis statement clear, limited, and interesting, and is it supported in your draft? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Review your introduction. Do you have a strong hook that engages the reader? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Does every entry on the Reference page have matching parenthetical references? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Are all your sources cited correctly? Does each parenthetical citation have a matching entry on the Reference page? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Does your thesis statement contain a main point and three subtopics? 

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Yes or No: Yes

Yes or No: Yes

Review the conclusion. Does it sum up your main points and restate the thesis? 

Yes or No: Yes

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Paragraph Revisions Does each paragraph have a strong topic sentence?

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Yes or No: Yes

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Do all sentences support the topic sentence?

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Yes or No: Yes

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Is the paragraph organized logically?

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Yes or No: Yes

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Do the sentences transition smoothly and logically?

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Yes or No: Yes

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Is each paragraph supported with sufficient details, examples, statistics, facts, research?

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Yes or No: Yes

 Editing 

Did you correct suggestions made by your word processing program’s spell check and grammar check? 

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Yes or No: Yes, and by LopesWrite

What errors have teachers most corrected on your past papers? Did you check for those same errors on this paper? 

Yes or No: Strong supporting sentences to back up the research I found and being concise in my writing. I did check for those same errors and had 3 people read over my draft to help check as well.

Did you check for some of the most common errors in your paper? Answer Yes or No: © 2016. Grand Canyon University. All Rights Reserved.

Comma splices/Run-ons: Yes Sentence Fragments: Yes Subject/verb agreement: Yes Faulty parallelism: Yes Misplaced commas: Yes Misused colons, semicolons: Yes Commonly confused words (for example- there, their): Yes

Are there any words that you use repeatedly in your paper? Yes, I do repeatedly use the words children, bully(ing), and victim. The reason for using these words repeatedly is because that is what my topic is on and I want to make sure I was clear on what my topic was, I didn’t want to use other words and confuse the reader on what my topic was. I did use adolescents a few times in place of children. Rereading my draft I also noticed I use the word “extreme” a lot when describing the physical health effects.

Consider word choice. Can you identify any sentences/phrases which are awkward and need to be rephrased?

Children are not meant to be put under extreme stress, so when their bodies experience these high levels of cortisol it can have extreme effects. This sentence feels repetitive with the word extreme and sounds awkward.

Could your sentence structure use more variety? © 2016. Grand Canyon University. All Rights Reserved.

I believe I have variety in my sentence structure with varying lengths, and use of complex/compound sentences.

Part 2: Strengths and Weaknesses Directions: Go through each component description below. Then give a brief explanation of what you did well, what you can improve upon, and your reasoning why – all boxes must be complete.

Organization: Proper heading in

What was done well:

What can be improved upon:

the upper left hand corner, five

My heading and reference page

My paragraph organization

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

My heading and reference page is done in

I feel like some of my paragraphs may be longer

APA format. I made sure to clear all

than the other. I want to make sure I improve on

formatting for my reference page and

making my body paragraphs similar in length to

ensure it was done correctly.

ensure it looks organized.

separated paragraphs, Reference Page

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Research: Proper topic that is

What was done well:

What can be improved upon:

supported with a peer reviewed

Research

In-text citations

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

I provided sufficient research for each

I need to ensure that I am citing the in-text citations

subtopic

correctly

Conventions/Mechanics: Proof-

What was done well:

What can be improved upon:

read entire paper, no spelling,

Spelling, reference page and punctuation

Word count

paper; paragraphs indented;

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

references are listed correctly on

I had no spelling or punctuation errors and

I need to work on having more than the minimum. I

reference page; minimum word

my reference page was done correctly

met the minimum word count but barely, I would

article (research is included through in-text citations/paraphrased information from article(s)

punctuation, or grammatical errors; double-spaced throughout entire

count has been met and maximum

like to be right in between minimum and maximum

word count has not been exceeded

word count.

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Word Choice: Academic writing is

What was done well:

What can be improved upon:

met, correct words used in context;

Use of correct words

Variety of sentence structures

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

I have a variety of vocabulary with the

I feel like I have a fair variety of sentence structure,

correct usage

but I would like to have a little bit more variety

essay contains a variety of sentence structures and uses complete, detailed expressions within the writing. *No incomplete, incoherent, or fragment sentences are found.

with complex and compound sentences

Voice/Tone: Essay is written in 3rd Person Point of View (there is no

What can be improved upon:

What was done well: rd

My essay is written in 3 Person

Relying on research

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

I don’t use any statements of I or my in my

I think I rely too much on my research rather than

essay

the research supporting my views. I want to try to

“I” statements in the writing); message is clear and original in thought from the writer’s perspective on the topic and arguments (research is only there to support these claims).

use research more sparingly just to support my claims.

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Sentence/Paragraph Fluency:

What was done well:

What can be improved upon:

There is a smooth transitioning

Sentence flow

Transition between paragraphs

Reasons why:

Reasons why:

My sentences flow together well and the

I think I can have a better flow at the end and

research flows well in my paragraphs

beginning of each of my paragraphs so my

between paragraphs; sentences within the body paragraphs flow and are easy to read and follow; there is an unison of the topic chosen and the arguments presented

sentences flow together better

in the essay; research enhances the paragraphs, and does not take the majority of the paragraph itselfagain, research is to support, not create the essay.

Part 3: Summary and Reflection Directions: Please write a summary based on the guidelines given below; write your summary in the space provided. In 250-300 words answer the following: 

After reviewing your strengths and weaknesses, what will you do the same and what will you do differently when completing your next college essay?

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What are some resources that you can use to help improve your areas of weakness?

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What advice would you give a new student to help with writing their first college essay?

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After reviewing my paper again, I have identified what I have done well and what I can improve on. I think that I have my paper formatted well with the exception for a couple incorrect in-text citations. I have my heading correct, my paper double spaced, my reference page done correctly, and have met the word count. I also have found sufficient research and had enough research for each of my paragraphs. However, when I write my next essay I do have some things I will improve on. I will make sure I use my in-text citations correctly and read through my paper to double check. I will also make sure that I meet the word count right around the middle so I’m not so close to the minimum word count. One big thing I also want to improve on is the transitioning of paragraphs, I will keep working on transition sentences so my paper flows together better. The main resource I think that would help me the most would be the writing process. This will help me along the way when I am writing my essay so I can improve on these things. My advice for a new student writing their first college essay is to use all the resources given to you! Make sure to follow the readings provided and utilize all the resources such as text books, the GCU style guide, GCU templates, the writing process and LopesWrite. These are all of the resources that made me more confident in writing my essay. I would also advise to a new student to start their work early and don’t procrastinate until Sunday to start your assignment, this will make class a lot easier.

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